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The maps illustrate changes happening in the city of Bates in 1950, 2000 and 2050. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps illustrate changes happening in the city of Bates in 1950, 2000 and 2050. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following maps compare the development of Bates in the years 1950,2000 and
prediction
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the prediction
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 of 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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this
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 city could see a considerable variation over the century,on the grounds that
city
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the city
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 altered from a rural area into an urban area by virtue of removal. Concerning
1950s
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the 1950s
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 and 2000s, there was not
huge
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a huge
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 change, as
industrial
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the industrial
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 plant
located
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was located
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 on the top of the left corner,
forest
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the forest
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on
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in
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 the
south east
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southeast
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 and
road
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the road
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 starting from
west
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the west
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 to
south
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the south
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 remained unchanged.
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,in the
north east
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northeast
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corner
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corner,
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 there was a lake which became
bay
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a bay
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 in 2000.
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, regarding
modification
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the modification
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 of
south west
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south-west
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, accommodation was downsized,
aslo
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and
market
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the market
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 was replaced by
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a theater
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theater
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theatre
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 and
supermarket
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supermarkets
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. In 2050, there was a substantial improvement. Touching on the road is predicted to extend to
northern
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the northern
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 and eastern
side
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sides
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.
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,
industrial
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the industrial
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 area is expected to be enhanced with the construction of warehouses and the downsized bay is supposed to be removed to establish
entertainment
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an entertainment
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center
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centre
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. Dealing with the forest,
it
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apply
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is assumed to be cleaned to convert it into residential
house
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houses
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 with parking.
Additionally
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,
this
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 transformation is
also
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 supposed to occur near the unchanged supermarket and theatre.
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