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Some people believe that there has to be an age limit regarding the users of social media to prevent possible problems they can cause. Do you agree or disagree? Do you think it is logical to design a social media application only for children and teenagers?

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In today's
information
age
, the pervasive nature of social
media
 initiates some concerns about dividing their audience by
age
 groups to address the negative potential implications of the
media
. From my point of view, it is really necessary to set the limitation for younger contacts in every application. Both agreement and disagreement will be discussed in the following context. In an attempt to discover how social
media
 can be harmful to children, we should recognize how they are exerted by the
media
. A wide range of
information
,
such
 as images and videos
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 uploaded through the Internet, which can be not suitable for offspring.
Moreover
, in the technology era, most software is downloaded for free without verifying the
age
 of their users, and their administrations are not responsible for the
information
 that they send.
For example
, children can easily install one of them, and watch some pictures or movies which is not produced for those under 18. Some believe that immediate action should be taken by the barons and tycoons to prevent these issues.
In contrast
, others assume that it can be elective for all users to what
information
 they want to pursue, watch and/or release in the mainstream
media
.
In addition
, they believe
age
 limitation is freedom right violent.
According to
this
 group's view, parents can set an
age
 limit to access social
media
 for their households individually, but it does not need to be performed by the owners of the
media
.
Furthermore
, they think that how these obstacles are more, the users are provoked more to follow them. In conclusion, it can be mentioned that we cannot ignore the potential threats of the
media
. I opine that it is really necessary that contacts of all programs must be divided by their
age
.
Additionally
, it is logical to initiate some
media
 applications only for the children and the youth to ensure that they are less under threat.
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task achievement
To improve your task achievement, provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. For instance, mention particular types of harmful content or specific social media platforms when discussing the negative impacts on children.
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Work on enhancing the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph clearly relates to your thesis statement and that there is a clear progression of ideas. Using transition words more effectively can help with this.
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The introduction and conclusion are present and contribute to the overall structure of the essay.
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