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You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want another. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place

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Dear Mr. Anderson, I am writing to thank you for the process management course, you organized, and ask for another one. Allow me to elaborate on the situation in detail. Yesterday, Andrey and I passed the first step of
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 process management course in ScumTrek. Mike, it was awesome, thank you very much for
such
 an opportunity. I
finally
 have managed to make heads or tails of those difficult terms and right now I am able to lead my team more effectively. We have discovered a general knowledge of process management, team leading and scrum meetings . I have obtained all the necessary information to move forward in my transport project.
However
, I would like to pass the second step of the program to get a KMP I certificate. It will help me to become a part of a private group and discuss my questions with other business professionals. The course is starting in two weeks at the same location (ScrumTrek auditorium
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downtown). Mike, I really want to catch
this
 train, it will be very helpful for my team and our company in general. Could you please allow me to roll up? I look forward to your decision. Yours sincerely, Vasiliy Rasskazov
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or argument. Your letter logically segmented the content, which helped maintain a clear focus throughout.
task achievement
Be consistent with your writing tone and style. Your letter successfully maintains a formal and respectful tone which is suitable for the context.
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Cover all parts of the task in sufficient detail. While you've effectively addressed each point, elaborating more on the specific benefits of the next course, for both you and the company, could enhance your response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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