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Some people argue that mass media only bring negative effect to society and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that
mass
media
 has had a negative impact on society and should be banned.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 view for several reasons.
Firstly
,
mass
media
 is the quickest way to disseminate
information
 from anywhere in the world.
This
 speed ensures that communication has a broader and more immediate impact.
For instance
, in the event of a natural disaster
such
 as an earthquake, rapid
information
 dissemination allows for quicker and more widespread assistance.
Secondly
, the accuracy and reliability of
information
 from
mass
media
 are generally higher than that from social
media
.
Mass
media
 provides clear and factual
information
, reducing ambiguity in society.
On the other hand
, social
media
 often fuels confusion and debate over the truth.
For example
, during the COVID-19 pandemic in 2020, social
media
 was rife with misinformation, including the false claim that the virus was created by the Chinese government. In reality, the virus originated from bats and spread through coughing and sneezing.
Mass
media
 played a crucial role in debunking
such
 myths and providing accurate
information
. In conclusion,
mass
media
 has positively impacted society by facilitating the rapid, widespread, and reliable spread of
information
.
Therefore
, its influence has been more beneficial than detrimental.
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task achievement
While the essay provides a comprehensive response to the prompt, including a clear rebuttal to the idea of banning mass media, it can be improved by briefly acknowledging the opposing viewpoint before refuting it. This would demonstrate a balanced approach and enhance the essay's persuasiveness.
coherence cohesion
Continue to ensure that paragraphs are well-structured and maintain a logical progression of ideas. Linking phrases and transitional words are used effectively. Further improvement can come from adding more variety in sentence structures to keep the reader engaged.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a logical and coherent structure with a clear introduction and conclusion, which strengthens the overall argument.
task achievement
The use of specific and relevant examples, such as the COVID-19 misinformation scenario, effectively supports the main points and makes the argument more compelling.

Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mass media
  • Public opinion
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Consumerism
  • Intellectual pursuits
  • Free speech
  • Unsustainable consumption
  • Hysteria
  • Social change
  • Regulation
  • Pervasiveness
  • Materialism
  • Political outcomes
  • Distortion of truth
  • Advocacy
  • Civic engagement
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