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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As the world becomes increasingly interconnected, working overseas comes into the topic of debate
hence
, there are differing views about professionals embarking on careers abroad rather than their home country. In the following essay, we will explore both perspectives, and I will share my personal viewpoint. Restricting professionals to their home countries may result in brain drain yet, graduates have benefited from their national resources and opportunities
accordingly
, they are expected to demonstrate a sense of responsibility and contribute their expertise back to their nation. On the one hand, pursuing a career in their own region can address shortages in critical job vacancies
as well as
 compensate for prior workforce losses and
therefore
, foster the economy.
For example
, a study which was carried out in South Africa points out that one loss in a skilled occupation will result in ten ordinary jobs.
On the other hand
, if a government forces specialists to stay and work against their wishes it may hinder their personal growth. Freedom of choice is a fundamental aspect of personal growth and development
furthermore
, working in a foreign country is a great approach for knowledge and workforce exchanges.
For instance
, residents of a hospital in Spain don’t have hands-on experience
due to
 safety measures
while
 in other countries
such
 as Argentina residents actually practice their skills with patients.
Moreover
,
this
 can foster global communications, which have been proven to increase efficiency and better job satisfaction, since different nationalities mean different beliefs and the introduction of new methods. In conclusion,
while
 it is essential to recognize the value of serving one’s home country, I firmly believe that it is equally important to acknowledge the benefits that come with international experiences
thus
, the pros of allowing professionals to work abroad cannot be overlooked.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, try to provide a more detailed exploration of each point and ensure that all aspects of the question are fully addressed. This involves elaborating slightly more on the long-term benefits and drawbacks of each viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, aim to refine the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to make it easier for readers to follow your argument. Also, avoid overly complex structures that might confuse readers.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and effective introduction and conclusion, both of which are essential elements of a well-structured essay.
task achievement
The main points are supported with relevant examples, adding depth and credibility to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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