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The diagrams show the life cycle of the lady bug and its anatomy.

The diagrams show the life cycle of the lady bug and its anatomy.
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The
two
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 illustrations depict the
lady
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bug
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's life cycle and its
body
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 parts, featuring its transformations of each stage and its main organs of the
lady
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bug
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.
Overall
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, there are fou main stages to go through: the egg, the
larva
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, the pupa and the mature
lady
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bug
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. Leaves are the main source of its food supply.
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, the whole
body
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 is composed of three sections: the head, the elytra and the abdomen.
Initially
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, eggs are laid under the leaf used as the protection until the
larva
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 hatches. It takes around
two
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 to five days for the
larva
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 to emerge from the egg. At the larval stage, the
larva
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 spends time on feeding for about twenty one days before Turing into the pupa. It is the next stage where the pupa hangs itself under the leaf and stays sill for a week.
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, the adult
lady
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bug
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 appears. The
lady
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bug
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's main task is to mate, reproduce and lay eggs. It is obvious that of the whole
body
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, its bright red wings are the most appealing to other
lady
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bug
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. It is located below from the head section which consists fo
two
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 antennae ,
two
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 eyes and a pronotum. The red wings with dots is part of the
body
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 which
also
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 includes its six legs. The
last
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 part is the abdomen located under the wings at the othe r end of the
body
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, lady, bug, body, larva with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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