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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
species
, like dinosaurs, have indeed gone extinct
due to
 natural
causes
. There is a view extrapolated from
this
 that suggests we should not make any effort to prevent other animals from facing the same fate. I fully disagree with
this
 view.  It is true that some
species
 face extinction
due to
 natural
causes
.
For example
, dinosaurs died out
due to
 a devastating asteroid impact that ended their reign of more than 180 million years. Another example is the Great Auk, which vanished
due to
 environmental changes
such
 as rising sea levels and reduced food availability. 
However
, these natural extinctions should not be an excuse for neglecting conservation efforts to protect other
species
. In fact, many
species
 are now threatened, primarily
due to
 human activities. The most famous example is the dodo, whose decline coincided with the arrival of the Dutch. The forests were cleared, the birds were hunted, and introduced animals devastated their nests, leading to the dodo's extinction. If many
such
species
 die out
due to
 human
causes
, it is only morally right for humans to protect them.  Another reason, perhaps a selfish one, is that the extinction of
species
 could negatively impact our own survival.
Although
 we remain at the top of the food chain, it is crucial to conserve the animal and bird
species
 at the lower levels. The
species
 we rely on for food, medicine, and other purposes could vanish if their prey disappears or if other disruptions occur in the ecosystem. If that happens, that puts our own survival at risk.  In conclusion,
while
 it is true that some
species
, like dinosaurs, became extinct
due to
 natural
causes
, the belief that we should not protect other
species
 is fundamentally flawed. Protecting their survival is not only a moral duty but
also
 crucial for our own survival.
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task achievement
Your response addresses the task prompt comprehensively and offers clear arguments to support your perspective. However, you could explore counterarguments briefly to show a more balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The essay flows well and the ideas are logically organized, which adds to the coherence and cohesion. To enhance it further, you could use a few more linking words to show the relationship between your arguments even more clearly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both clear and effectively present your stance and summary of the argument.
task achievement
You provide relevant and specific examples (dinosaurs, dodo, Great Auk) which strengthen your arguments significantly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • ecosystems
  • environmental ethics
  • habitat destruction
  • anthropogenic impact
  • ecological balance
  • natural selection
  • wildlife preservation
  • genetic diversity
  • endangered species
  • biological heritage
  • sustainable practices
  • Anthropocene
  • cascade effects
  • intrinsic value
  • habitat conservation
  • extinction crisis
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