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Some people think news has no connection to peoples lives. Therefore, it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the rise in technology, we see the
news
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 in many various ways
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 as on Instagram, on our TVs or in the newspaper, regardless of
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,
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 has become an integral part of our lives whether we like it or not. I believe that watching the
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 is neither a waste nor a good way of spending time. On one hand,
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news
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 causes awareness and helps people form an opinion and campaign against a person or a law like the Kolkata rape tragedy
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 happening in India, it
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 helps people gain knowledge about different aspects of their life like politics or current affairs.
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 is
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 used to spread information to the masses and
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, has a huge influence on people.
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,
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 serves as historical records and is evidence of what happened in the past.
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, it
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 helps us understand different perspectives on a particular topic.
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, the huge influence of
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 can
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 be used in a negative way as most
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 channels and creators are controlled by political parties which
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 use their power to spread propaganda. Most of the
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 these days is completely unreliable
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 being irrelevant to some extent which makes it hard to trust a
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 channel or newspaper.
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 channels
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 misuse their power by framing someone or something by taking a certain situation out of context to gain popularity and views.
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, I think that we should have a reliable
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 source and be mindful of the
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 we are consuming
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 trying to understand both perspectives of a situation before taking a side.
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introduction
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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