You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. Your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit. Write to the museum. In your letter •Tell them what you liked and what you didn’t like •Make some suggestions for improvement •Describe some other exhibits you would like to see You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
letter to share my feedback on my recent visit to
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museum.
To begin
with,
firstly
, I liked a few new sections that
are
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added to the ancient history section, especially the part
showed
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that showed
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different stages of human evolution.
Secondly
, the light and sound
show
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on
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different
archeological
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events was
also
very good.
However
, there were some issues
also
, first and foremost,
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counter operates for a short time,
due to
which in order to, get tickets people arrived very early and there was a long
que
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queue
outside the museum.
Lastly
, there was no provision
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refreshment
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inside the building,
as a result
, we had to leave our tour in between to buy some eatables from outside. In order to attract more visitors, you can prolong the ticket obtaining times, so that more people
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enjoy the trip. Adding more to it, you can open a few food outlets on every floor, which would
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people to buy food from inside the museum only. In the end, I would urge you that on public demand, it would be great if you
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add a new section on
freedom
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the freedom
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struggle of India.
This
will not only attract more visitors but it will
also
motivate the young ones to become ideal citizens. I hope my reviews are helpful and I am looking forward to hearing from you as well. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
The ideas in the letter are generally well-organized, but ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This can enhance the clarity and flow of your letter.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors and punctuation issues. Improving these minor details can enhance the overall quality of your writing.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-done, setting a polite and respectful tone throughout.
task achievement
Your letter successfully addresses all aspects of the prompt, providing a detailed response that is easy to follow and understand.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exhibit
  • architectural design
  • educational value
  • interactive displays
  • accessibility features
  • contemporary art
  • local history
  • child-friendly
  • guided tours
  • workshops
  • enhanced
  • crowded environment
  • seating
  • differently-abled visitors
  • activities
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