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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030
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The line graph below illustrates the average number of UK citizens commuting on a daily basis by different vehicles( bus,train,car)
It is clear that
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 usage of public transport over time has fallen gradually
while
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 the popularity of travelling by car has increased almost twice as much.
Moreover
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, using the train as a way to get to the point has risen by 3
million
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. In 1970 around 5
million
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 British people used engine machines and the number of its use increased steadily by 2000 and reached approximately 7
million
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 people. From the beginning of
timeline
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the timeline
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 till the second century, there was another upward trend among commuters who preferred the train as a transport and it reached 3
million
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.
By contrast
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, the number of people using the bus fell gradually over the period and reached less than 4
million
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 by 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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