In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their childen themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many parents in different parts of the world have started to prefer home-schooling their
children
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instead
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of sending them to
school
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.
This
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essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the topic. On one hand, home-schooling
children
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would mean that the
child
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has no opportunity to get bullied
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also
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preventing them from interacting with explicit and inappropriate content. Home-schooling
children
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could
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be a more fun way for students to learn new things
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to the normal ways of
school
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. Home-schooling is
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useful for people who travel frequently as it is more flexible and because attendance does not have any significant meaning
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home-schooling. Home-schooling is useful for parents who can not afford tuition fees for their
children
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as home-schooling is more
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.
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, home-schooling someone blocks them from interacting with people and making friends, which can make the
child
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anti-social and can become a problem later in life.
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, parents who have no prior experience in teaching can
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make understanding new things difficult for their
children
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. Going to a normal
school
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also
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helps a
child
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look at the world through different perspectives, which is not possible
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home-schooling. Home-schooling prevents a student from doing daily physical activities like walking or climbing up the stairs, which could hinder
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the growth of the
child
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while
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also
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making them lazy and incompetent.
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, in order for anyone to grow as an individual, they must be put in unfavourable circumstances. I believe that the advantages of homeschooling do not outweigh the disadvantages, I believe that every
child
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should go to a normal
school
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if possible.
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