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Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include: 1) What the gift is 2) Why you chose it 3) How it will be delivered. Write at least 150 words .

#friend #house #gift
Dear Anfisa, I am very glad to receive
this
 perfect news. I know how you wanted
moved
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 into a new house on the first line of the sea. Congratulations to you !!! In
honor
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 of
this
 news, I have sent you the best kitchen set of pots and knives I could find. I've been thinking for a long time about what to give you, and when I was looking
my
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galery
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gallery
, I saw your video where you cooked a pretty cake for your birthday. And when I saw
this
 video I remembered that you love cooking very much. And I invented what kind of gift I could send you. DHL will contact you within 2-3 days and specify the address of the house and the comfortable date of receipt
the
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 parcel. I hope you like my gift, and you will
sand
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send
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 the invitation
me
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 to a housewarming party, as soon as possible Wish you good luck Love, Filipp 157 words
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grammar
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and sentence structures for better clarity. For example, 'I know how you wanted moved into a new house' should be 'I know how much you wanted to move into a new house.'
clarity
Clarify your message when indicating the point about how the gift will be delivered. For example, 'DHL will contact you within 2-3 days to confirm your address and schedule a convenient delivery date.'
tone
The letter has a warm and personal tone which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
task compliance
You've successfully covered all the points mentioned in the task. The gift, the reason for choosing it, and the delivery method are all clearly mentioned.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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