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Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include: 1) What the gift is 2) Why you chose it 3) How it will be delivered. Write at least 150 words .

#friend #house #gift
Dear Anfisa, I am very glad to receive
this
 perfect news. I know how you wanted
moved
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 into a new house on the first line of the sea. Congratulations to you !!! In
honor
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 of
this
 news, I have sent you the best kitchen set of pots and knives I could find. I've been thinking for a long time about what to give you, and when I was looking
my
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galery
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gallery
, I saw your video where you cooked a pretty cake for your birthday. And when I saw
this
 video I remembered that you love cooking very much. And I invented what kind of gift I could send you. DHL will contact you within 2-3 days and specify the address of the house and the comfortable date of receipt
the
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 parcel. I hope you like my gift, and you will
sand
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send
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 the invitation
me
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 to a housewarming party, as soon as possible Wish you good luck Love, Filipp 157 words
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grammar
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and sentence structures for better clarity. For example, 'I know how you wanted moved into a new house' should be 'I know how much you wanted to move into a new house.'
clarity
Clarify your message when indicating the point about how the gift will be delivered. For example, 'DHL will contact you within 2-3 days to confirm your address and schedule a convenient delivery date.'
tone
The letter has a warm and personal tone which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
task compliance
You've successfully covered all the points mentioned in the task. The gift, the reason for choosing it, and the delivery method are all clearly mentioned.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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