Wild Animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild
animals
because we humans have no need for them. I Completely disagree with this
point of view. C In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild anishals
have no place in the 21st Century. I do not believe that Correct your spelling
animals
initials
planct
Earth exists only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about Correct your spelling
planet
plant
this
particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore
, there is no compelling reason why we should let animals
die out. We do not need to exploit or destroy every last
square meter of land in order to feed or accommodate the world's population. There is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals
, and this
should be our aim. I also
disagree with the idea that protecting animals
is a waste of resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures the survival of wild animals
, and most scientists agree that these habitats are also
crucial for human survival. For
example
rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilise the Earth's climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of Managing the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conversation. By protecting wild Add a comma
example,
animals
and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.
lu conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.Submitted by arniaqlina44 on
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grammar vocabulary
Ensure consistency in punctuation and spelling. For example, 'anishals' should be 'animals' and 'planct' should be 'Planet'.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to better connect ideas between paragraphs. For example, words like 'Additionally' or 'Moreover' can improve the flow.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the context and states your position, making it clear to the reader from the outset.
task achievement
Main points are well-developed with relevant arguments and specific examples, such as the reference to rainforests producing oxygen and absorbing carbon dioxide.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main arguments and reiterates the position in a succinct manner.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite