Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In today’s world, the number of children who allocate most part of their day to using handsets is increasing sharply.
Although
the development of technology can be very useful somehow, I strongly believe that its drawbacks outweigh the benefits, and in Linking Words
this
essay, I will discuss why.
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To begin
with, I think parents have crucial impacts on their children’s behaviour including the correct way of using cell phones. Unfortunately, nowadays most parents use smart devices as a babysitter to keep their kids amused and busy, so they have time for their own activities. Linking Words
Besides
, infants and teenagers find smartphones interesting and exciting. Linking Words
Accordingly
, visual media replace any other recreational hobbies Linking Words
such
as playing outdoors, board games or any sort of sport. In Iran, during the past decade, using mobile phones has occupied a significant time of a kid’s daily life and the most vital cause of Linking Words
this
issue has been stated as negligence of parents to upbringing their children.
The major negative effects of wild usage of these devices can be the diminished creativity in infants and the occurrence of violent behaviour among adolescents. Linking Words
According to
the new research conducted on kindergartens, children under 7 years of age who spend most of their free time using smartphones, show less flexibility and creativity in their daily practices. Linking Words
Also
, plenty of cruel and rough acts have been seen among teenagers who spend the main part of their day watching movies on social media.
In conclusion, like any other cutting-edge technology, smartphones have a number of advantages. Linking Words
However
, if we aren’t able to control the young generation, a devastating situation will happen in the near future that proves the losses of smart devices aren’t worth their merits.Linking Words
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Expand on the reasons why children find smartphones interesting. Perhaps include examples of specific activities they engage in on smartphones.
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