the chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in householdsin one country between 1920 and 2019.

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the number of hours of housework per week in a country between 1920 and 2019. It is clearly seen that the percentage of households in all 3 categories had

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the number of hours had a downward trend (

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significant growth and reached 100% in 1980 and

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was 40% in 1920 , it rose to 70% in 1960 and after a minimal

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decline in

1980, reached around 75% in 2019. The

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cleaner was 30% at

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it rose sharply and reached 100% in 2000 and remained the same until 2019.

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decreased and reached about 35 and 20 in 1940 and 1960, respectively,

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it declined slightly and reached almost 10 in 2019.

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