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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the data about the
number
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 of
shop
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 closures and the new
shop
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 establishment from 2011 to 2018. In general, both categories had a downward trend during seven years.
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, the
number
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 of new
shops
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 opened was a more noticeable decrease.
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, the closed
shops
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 had a more significant low, except in 2015 the amount
shops
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 decreased sharply. Regarding the stores that closed, there were nearly 6500
cases
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 recorded in 2011. For the third consecutive
year
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, the
number
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 of stores oscillated from under 6000 to more than 7000
cases
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 before they dipped in 2015 with approximately 500 at the bottom. Rising back up in the following
year
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, the figures tenfold the
year
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 before went up to 5000
cases
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.
Then
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 remained stable in the next
year
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. In another aspect, the figures for
shop
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 openings started with a peak in 2011, with over 8500
cases
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 before they fell dramatically in the next
year
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. The line of
shop
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 opening shows the lowest point by more than 50% with relatively 4000
cases
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. In the second continuous
year
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 rebounded and reached the second peak,
over
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 6000
cases
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 in 2014.
This
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 data
then
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 dropped to the 2012 level and levelling off until 2017 before fluctuating in 2018 to around 3000
cases
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shop, shops, cases, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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