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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the shift of
people
 from rural to urban areas in three unknown countries between
years
Correct article usage
the years
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 2000 and 2025.
Overall
, the
number
 of
people
 in those countries constantly
increase
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increases
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 from time to time. In 2000,
Country
 A started
at
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with
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 18
million
people
 who moved.
Then
, in 2005, the
number
 steadily up to around 36
million
people
. After that, in 2010, there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 41
million
people
 who moved to cities. In predictions, the
number
 will
remainly
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remain
 rise
until
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by
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 2025.
Besides
 that, there is a
Country
 B. In 2000, from
years
 2000 to 2020, the
number
 was significantly rose. Begin with 10
million
people
 to 30
million
people
.
However
, the
number
 will remain steadily in
years
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the years
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 2020 until 2025.
Last
country
,
initially
,
Country
 C was the lowest with only about 5
million
people
 who shifted. Even, in 2005, the
number
still
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was still
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 below 20
million
people
. But, suddenly
climb
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climbed
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 and the
number
become
Wrong verb form
became
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 bigger and bigger.
Moreover
, the prediction for future
years
, the
number
 of
people
 who are moving to cities in
Country
 C will more
large
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larger
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 than two other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, number, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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