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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the
amount
 of five types of vegetables exported to Qatar in the period from 1980 to 2020. parameters measured in
tonnes
.
Overall
, spinach was the most consumed vegetable among all five types in Qatar throughout the given period ,
while
 peas consumption was the lowest.
Firstly
,
figures
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the figures
show examples
of
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for
show examples
 spinach showed a downward trend,
initially
, almost 500
tonnes
 were exported in 1980,
afterforward
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afterwards
after forward
, the export
amount
 decreased gradually to almost 420
tonnes
 in 1990 and stayed stable
untill
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until
 2000, when it continued to slope until reaching nearly 380
tonnes
at the end
.
Secondly
, garlic and broccoli both exhibited an
upword
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upward
 trend. From
1980to
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1980 to
 2000, broccoli
amount
 was nearly stable at around 200
tonnes
,
while
 garlic showed an increase from almost 300
tonnes
 to 380
tonnes
, in 1980 and 2000 respectively. Both garlic and broccoli amounts continued to increase until reached the highest
amount
 in 2020 at 300 and 400
tonnes
 respectively.
Lastely
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Lastly
, peas maintained nearly a constant level from the start of the period to the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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