WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the punctual
rate
of buses arriving between actual Use synonyms
performance
and target Use synonyms
performance
and illustrate the figures Use synonyms
of
passengers’ complaints from 1999 to 2003.
It is evident that the target Change preposition
for
performance
of buses arriving on time gradually dropped during the period Use synonyms
while
the actual Linking Words
performance
saw a fluctuation and Use synonyms
finally
returned next to 80% in 2003. Apart from that, the complaints number presented an upward trend from 1999 to 2003.
Looking at the information in more detail, in 1999, the actual Linking Words
performance
of buses arriving on time was similar to the predicted one (around 80%). During the period from 2001 to 2002, Use synonyms
actual
punctual Correct article usage
the actual
rate
shared almost the same percentage (next to 40%), following with the figure in 2000 (about 30% ), Use synonyms
while
the target Linking Words
rate
remained Use synonyms
steadily
Change the word
steady
around
40% from 2000 to 2003. 2003 witnessed a sharp rise in Change preposition
at around
actual
Correct article usage
the actual
rate
(almost 78%), which presented the hugest gap between Use synonyms
actual
Add an article
the actual
rate
and Use synonyms
predicted
Correct article usage
the predicted
rate
. Use synonyms
Additionally
, we can see from the second pie chart, Linking Words
the
number of Correct pronoun usage
that the
complains
indicated an increasing trend throughout the five years. Replace the word
complaints
Over all
, the number rose from 60 in 1999 to 120 in 2003.Correct your spelling
Overall
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, performance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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