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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart depicts the number of
citizen
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citizens
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 who engaged
to
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apply
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the
radio
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 and television in the United Kingdom during the day in October until December 1992.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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 the majority of the people spent their morning time with
radio
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. Afterwards, on the afternoon until midnight, most of the people would
watched
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watch
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 the television.
However
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, television had a gradual trend from morning until the afternoon,
then
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 it became swiftly surging and met its
vertext
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vertex
 on approximately 50% of the UK population at 8 PM. Even though, its watchers directly dropped until after 2 AM. Meanwhile, the
radio
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 listeners showed
the
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a
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 significant increase
on
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in
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morning
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the morning
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 and met its peak
on
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at
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 almost 30% of
population
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the population
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 at around 9 AM.
Subsequently
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, it had a downward trend which decreased gradually until
also
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 around 2 AM. On top of that all, both people who listened to
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radio
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the radio
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 and watched the
televison
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television
, would
met
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 on the same number at roughly around 1 PM.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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