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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
The line graph presents how many people visited four world-famous museums throughout the time period from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the number of guests was rising for the Louvre and Vatican
Museum
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,
whereas
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 the London Science
Museum
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 and Shenzhen
Museum
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 were visited less frequently. Turning to details, the most substantial rise is witnessed in the quantity of visits to Vatican Museums with a twofold progression to nearly 9
million
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 in 2015.
However
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, the Louvre attendance did not lose its leading position throughout the period, fluctuating between approximately 8 and 9.5 mln visits in 1980 and 2015 respectively. The turning point was observed in 2000 when the number of Louvre visitors declined significantly to just above 8 mln followed by a peak of almost 10 mln in 2015.
Conversely
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, the London Science
Museum
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 was being visited by fewer people each year with 4
million
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 guests in 1980, reducing to around 2
million
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 by 2015. The Shenzhen 1980-year attendance had fallen from 4 to 3
million
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 by 2000 before recovering to 4
million
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 15 years later.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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