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the three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts illustrate the proportion of expenditure by one school  in the British for three decades, between 1981 and 2001.
Overall
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, the school used the most of their spending for teacher
salaries
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. Meanwhile, their expense for
insurance
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 was
on
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 the lowest spending.  In 1981, teacher
salaries
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 and other worker
salaries
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 were
on
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 the top two majorities, with 40% and 28% respectively.
However
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, in 1991, teacher
salaries
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 had a gradual increase to 50% and the other worker
salaries
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 dropped to 22% of spending.
Likewise
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, the furniture and equipment
which
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apply
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also
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 decreased by 10%
on
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 the same year. Resources and
Insurance
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,
on the other hand
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, were increased marginally, in order from 15% to 20% for the resources, and 2% to 3% for
insurance
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. Afterwards,
insurance
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 was still on the lowest expenditure until 2001.
Hence
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 the furniture and equipment had a significant rise
on
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 that year, from 5% to 23% of spending.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, insurance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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