Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Some individuals think that if someone has once committed a
crime
, he or she will repeat it, as they stay a criminal forever. This
essay completely disagrees with that statement, owing to the type of crime
and individual characteristics of a person
.
Many people
who have committed a crime
even once, face many problems in their lives after serving a sentence. This
is because their authority gets decreased and many people
judge them, as they live with the idea that if a person
was
a criminal, nothing changes - they will stay a criminal forever. But actually, Wrong verb form
is
this
is not true. Some people
become criminals
by
the situation, Change preposition
in
although
they did
not want it, Wrong verb form
do
for example
, person
X can beat person
Y during the fight and because of the injury
that Add a comma
injury,
person
may die, which will automatically make person
X a criminal. Sometimes criminals
are even not guilty, but they cannot talk about that because of different reasons, for example
, they may be blackmailed with the lives of their family members and so on. These people
are officially criminals
, but in fact, they are not. From that, we can understand that they will not always be criminals
as they even were not ever. The TV channel namely NTV interviewed 250 criminals
, 111 said that they were not guilty and would never do something illegal, while
139 admitted their guilt and 122 of them promised that they would never commit a crime
again.
However
, committing a crime
for the second,
third and even more times depends on personality very much. Various individuals have different characters. Punishment can affect criminals
differently. Some of them may understand that they should change
their lifestyle and be far from illegal actions, meanwhile, other criminals
will never ever change
and will do the same when they get free. Society should not think that if
one criminal is unchangeable, all of them are. Correct word choice
apply
Furthermore
, most of the criminals
tend to change
rather than commit a crime
again. Again, according to
the first example, total
of 233 out of 250 Add an article
a total
criminals
promised to change
and not repeat their actions again.
To conclude
, this
essay does not support the idea that criminals
always stay criminals
, as staying a criminal or not depends on the type of crime
and the criminal's personality.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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The essay presents a clear argument against the statement, providing relevant examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay.
coherence cohesion
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