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Some believe that the development of technology and improved software allow us to translate between language automatically. Therefor, it is not necessary to learn foreign languages any more. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that technology development and software improvement permit users to transfer between
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 automatically which makes it not important to study foreign
languages
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 anymore. The writer of
this
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 essay is in agreement with the notion of communicating with
foreigners
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 quickly
along with
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 reliability concerns. The current issue is that it takes
people
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 who use foreign
languages
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such
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 as English to communicate with each other efficiently and conveniently. To put it simply,
people
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 can talk with
foreigners
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 in an efficient way if they know how to use a foreign language.
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, if
people
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 rely on using translation apps
such
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 as Google Translate or Oxford Dictionary to translate speech, they will find it difficult to converse with others because of slow answers.
For example
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, Vietnamese students have to study the English language in order to make teenagers talk with
foreigners
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 easily
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 of using translating media. Another core reason is how it is necessary for reliability concerns.
In other words
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, many translation apps on the Internet sometimes have many errors in interpreting abroad
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.
Furthermore
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, many bad manners have a lot of tools and tricks to change the meaning of a foreign language into a negative meaning.
As a result
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,
people
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 will misapprehend when they talk with each other which can cause arguments and make relationships worse. In conclusion, by talking with
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 conveniently and efficiently
as well as
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 having reliability concerns,
people
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 should not rely much on technology and software to put the way for
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 foreign
languages
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 in social communication.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency throughout the essay. The initial statement of agreement with the notion should clearly align with the arguments provided in the body paragraphs. Avoid any potential contradictions.
task achievement
Enrich the content with more comprehensive and detailed examples to better illustrate the points made. Specific examples can strengthen arguments and make them more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Avoid redundancy and improve the clarity of sentences. For instance, avoid using repetitive phrases like 'efficient and convenient' twice. Simple and precise language enhances readability.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains a clear and relevant introduction and conclusion. These sections effectively summarize the main points and provide a clear stance on the issue.
task achievement
The points raised in the body paragraphs are relevant to the topic and support the overall argument of the essay. This demonstrates a good understanding of the issue.

Your opinion

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