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You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: ● apologize for being late in returning the money ● explain what happened ● say how you are going to fix the issue now

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Dear Maninder, I hope
this
 letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
 letter to offer my apologies because I failed to pay back the money I borrowed from you in time. I am ashamed
for
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of
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this
 conduct of mine. I was facing a few personal issues,
due to
 which I totally forgot to return the funds.
Firstly
, I was jobless for two months,
owing
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 to
it
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this
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, I faced many financial hardships. Adding more to it, my mother was admitted
in
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 hospital because she suffered a heart attack.
Thus
, all of these issues caused the delay.
However
, now things have improved a little. I got a new job and my mother is
also
 fine.
Therefore
, now I will start paying you back in the form of monthly installments and I will try to finish the loan in a few months from now. In the end, I hope you will forgive me for
this
 misconduct. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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task achievement
Include more specific details about the repayment plan to enhance the completeness of the response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain a seamless flow of ideas.
task achievement
Your tone is very suitable for an apology letter, demonstrating respect and remorse.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a logical beginning, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, maintaining clarity and coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial hardship
  • unintended oversight
  • profoundly regretful
  • amicable resolution
  • irreplaceable support
  • repayment schedule
  • heartfelt gratitude
  • unwavering patience
  • promptly address
  • sincerely apologize
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