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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
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The chart illustrates the changes in rates of three different crime areas (burglary, car theft, and robbery) in Newport
city
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 between the years 2003 and 2012.
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,
while
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 burglary had the highest crime rates, robberies remained the lowest among all throughout the
period
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.
The car
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Car
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 theft
crimes
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 surpassed burglaries after a certain
period
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. In 2003, the rate of
crimes
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 in burglary was highest at about 3400
incidents
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, which
then
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 decreased dramatically to around 1100
incidents
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 in 2008, and remained under 1500
incidents
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 until the end of the
period
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. The car theft
crimes
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 were approximately 2800
incidents
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 in 2003, which decreased to almost 2000
incidents
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 in 2006.
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 figure
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 experienced a steady increase and reached around 2700
incidents
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 in 2012, with a small dip in 2011 at 2500
incidents
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. The robberies recorded in 2003 were about 600
incidents
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, being the lowest than any of the other
crimes
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. The number of
incidents
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then
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 decreased to 500 in 2008, after which it experienced a fluctuation until the end of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, crimes, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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