The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two charts provide data about the gender and
number
of
athletes
who entered the Games between 1924 and 2012.
Overall
, the bar chart indicates that the
number
of male and female
participants
in the Olympics increased from 1924 until the end of the period.
Furthermore
, there were consistently more male than female
athletes
every year. The line graph depicts the upward trajectory in the
number
of
athletes
. The bar chart illustrates that there was a massive disparity between the
number
of men and women contestants until 2012. In 1924, the
number
of male
participants
was 3,000.
Subsequently
, it increased gradually to reach a peak in 2012 of approximately 6,000, double over the years.
However
, the
number
of women
participants
saw a steady upward trend from 1924 to 1984 with about 1,500
athletes
. Following that, between 1984 and 2012, it skyrocketed to nearly 5,000, only approximately 1,000 fewer than male
participants
. The line graph shows a similar trend; the figure for Olympians saw steady growth from 1924 to 1984 increasing from about 3,000 to 7,000 people.
Then
, it rose sharply between 1984 and 2012, at which point over 10,000
participants
increased from the starting point about 5 times.
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