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The maps show a beachfront in Australia in 1950and today, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show a beachfront in Australia in 1950and today, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#maps #show #beachfront #australia #information #features #comparisons
The maps illustrate the information about
a
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the
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 beachfront
of
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in
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 Australia, in 1950 and now.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a beachfront transformation from a new view. In the
1950
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1950s
, the road along the coast was
a
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apply
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much
short
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shorter
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. The length of the road did not reach the lighthouse and
also
 there was
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a
the
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playground in the near of city, but until today, the beachfront
saw
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has seen
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 a number of significant changes. The most noticeable is that
road
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the road
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 was extended to the lighthouse and close
the
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to the
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 lighthouse surf club was constructed and
playground
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the playground
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 was removed.
Instead
 of
this
 place car park
erected
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was erected
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. In
contract
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contrast
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,
25
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the 25
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m
pool
 is
in
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on
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 the east of the beach and
also
 in the west of the beach there was
25
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a 25
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m
pool
. The
pool
 which was located west of the beach was long - standed to 50m
pool
 in
this
 area
wast
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was
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 side of the
pool
 restaurant, surf club was demolished.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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