Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the ancient days, people used to walk and travel by bull carts without producing any
pollution
. In recent decades after the invention of machinery, factories and vehicles
have emitted carbon gases
into the atmosphere damaging the Ozone layer. Many people argue that these issues cannot be solved by the citizens and say that it is a global issue, while
others believe that contamination of dangerous gases
can be stopped by individual nations if take some precautions. I completely agree if some rules and regulations are imposed on countries
and the public , it can make our globe safe.
Firstly
, there are many methods to stop pollution
on the earth. The most important strategy is to stop the use
of diesel and petrol vehicles
, so less pollution
will be emitted into the air. Another factor is to reduce the use
of fossil fuels in factories, which emit smoke and dangerous gases
. For example
, many big industries in developed countries
such
as paper mills, sugar mills and chemical industries are emitting 24-hour smoke into the sky, which results in transmitting gases
affecting many people’s health and disturbing the ecosystem.
Secondly
, another primary reason is the treaty must be signed by all nations and agreed to emit a certain level of carbon into the atmosphere, so it can reduce pollution
. In addition
, everybody must take personal responsibility to use
fewer diesel vehicles
and instead
to use
battery-operated motors, such
as electronic cars and public transport. For instance
, the Chinese Government is supporting its citizens to use
electric vehicles
and giving subsidies.
In conclusion, following the analysis of how pollution
can be reduced and the involvement of the public and countries
, it is clear that
if people use
public transport and battery-operated vehicles
and different countries
sign treaties and agree to reduce contamination levels, it can help to save the earth.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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