Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?
Nowadays, most
people
tend to be careless about the fact behind Use synonyms
ultraprocessed
Correct your spelling
ultra-processed
ultra processed
food
as they are more Use synonyms
concern
about the spending on their groceries. In my opinion, many Replace the word
concerned
people
could not care less about what kind of Use synonyms
food
they are consuming as long as it is still in their budget.
In modern society, instant Use synonyms
food
has become a trend for its efficiency. Most Use synonyms
people
would prefer to have supermarket Use synonyms
food
because it is easier to cook and Use synonyms
cost
less compared to Correct subject-verb agreement
costs
the
regular Correct article usage
apply
meal
regardless of the ingredients Fix the agreement mistake
meals
contains
in Wrong verb form
contained
those
processed Correct determiner usage
apply
food
. Use synonyms
As a result
, Linking Words
this
kind of diet has affected the health of the majority of Linking Words
people
in many countries. Use synonyms
For instance
, in the United States when the number of citizens who consume ultraprocessed Linking Words
food
is increasing, it is followed by the rise of diabetes cases. Use synonyms
In addition
, many companies have put the Linking Words
label
of ingredients and nutrition facts Fix the agreement mistake
labels
in
their products, Change preposition
on
however
, only a few Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
who
are aware enough to read Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
before Correct pronoun usage
them
add
Change the verb form
adding
it
to their Correct pronoun usage
them
groceries
cart at the supermarket. Most Fix the agreement mistake
grocery
people
would look at the price first to decide whether or not they should buy any instant Use synonyms
food
.
It is Use synonyms
arguably
that there are certain factors that affect Change the word
arguable
Use synonyms
people
decision Change noun form
people's
in buying
Change preposition
to buy
meal
. The majority of Add an article
a meal
people
believe that economic factor has the biggest influence on diet. Use synonyms
For example
, those from lower class Linking Words
family
who Fix the agreement mistake
families
lives
in urban areas do not have any choices but to eat anything they Correct subject-verb agreement
live
could
afford. Educational background is the second reason that Wrong verb form
can
influence
many Correct subject-verb agreement
influences
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
food
Use synonyms
preference
. Those with health Fix the agreement mistake
preferences
background
Change the noun form
backgrounds
such
as Linking Words
nutritians
or doctors usually have Correct your spelling
nutritionists
the
understanding of healthy and nutritious Correct article usage
an
food
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, they tend to control their diet to maintain their health.
As far as I am concerned, it is true that many Linking Words
people
still do not have Use synonyms
the
awareness of how their Correct article usage
an
food
is produced Use synonyms
due to
their tight budget. Linking Words
Moreover
, Linking Words
food
choices Use synonyms
also
depend on economic conditions and educational background.
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