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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line graph illustrates changes in possession of electrical devices and time spent on
household
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 chores in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the use of electrical items increased within
this
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period
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,
in contrast
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 decreased between 1920 and 2019. (
Overall
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, there is a negative correlation between the two trends: the use of electrical items increased within
this
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period
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,
in contrast
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 decreased between 1920 and 2019.) In 1920, washing machines were the most preferred in
household
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 chores and they stood at 40%,
while
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 vacuum cleaners were the second most demanded in apartments at 30%. In
this
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period
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, the refrigerator was not popular as it owned by 0 %. In 1980, the demand for refrigerators increased and reached
the
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 highest point at 100%. The same growing/burgeoning trend has
also
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 been observed in 2 other
household
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 items, as vacuum cleaners reached 90% of ownership in 1980
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while
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 washing machines had a gradual decrease in comparison with 1960. All three
household
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 appliances followed a similar trend till 2019. Both vacuum cleaners and refrigerators reached 100% in 2019
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 washing machines rose to 75%
at the end
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 of the reported
period
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. The
number
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 of
hours
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 spent on housework substantially decreased from 1920 to 1980 from 50
hours
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 per week to 15
hours
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 per week. The
number
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 of
hours
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 allocated for daily duties remained stable until 2000
while
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 there was a slight decrease between 2000 and 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, period, number, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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