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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Law
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 is the foundation of
countries
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 worldwide.
Although
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 many people believe that a single
law
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system
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 brings many advantages to all
countries
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 around the world, others argue that each
nation
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 must have its own constitutional practice.
This
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 essay will explain both views and give my personal opinion. On the one hand, a unified legal rule may have a slight advantage to the societies.
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, it will not be suitable for many nations with their specialities.
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, several nations have agreed to legalize LGBT marriage. But,
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regulation
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 will definitely be inapplicable to Muslim-majority states
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 a mismatch between country and religious rule. Another example, monarch
countries
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 have their own legal
system
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 to choose their leader based on patrilinear lines. If
this
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 monarch
system
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 applies to current democratic nations, there will be a mass protest
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 the nepotism of the president's son who becomes the next leader.
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, giving freedom to every
nation
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 to choose its own legal rule brings more impact to the societies rather than a single legal
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. Muslim states like Maldives can apply an Islamic
law
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system
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 and Catholic
countries
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 like the Vatican can
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 have the right to use a Catholic
law
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 practice. Having a different
regulation
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 for every country will be beneficial for multicultural
countries
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 as well. Indonesia, as a multicultural and multi-ethnic
nation
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, has some special regions that are obligated to practice their own
regulation
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, which is Aceh for Islamic
regulation
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, and Yogyakarta for the monarch sultanate legal
system
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. Giving freedom to choose its own
law
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 will make it easier for Indonesia to adapt to its cultural diversity.
To sum up
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,
while
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 many people think that a unified legal
system
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 across the world will bring more valuable impact, I firmly believe that letting each
nation
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 determine its own respective
law
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 will bring more massive and significant advantages to people.
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