The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits during the same two periods.

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits during the same two periods.
The table illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
before and after it was reconstructed. The pie graphs show the answers of visitors to questions about their satisfaction with the
museum
during the two periods.
Overall
, it is clear from the charts that the number of
people
who visited the
museum
increased after refurbishment.
Additionally
, the main percentage of
people
was dissatisfied with
museum
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the museum
a museum
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, but after reconstruction
this
number of answers decreased and the
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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who were very glad to visit it went up. In terms of numbers, the visitor's amount was lower at the beginning at approximately 75,000 per year and
its
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it
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rose to just above 90,000 per year. For
people
sanctification, it had a significant per cent at exactly 40%,
people
who did not have satisfaction, and the less crucial feature was
people
, who had satisfied
answer
at 30%. The minimum percentage was
people
who had no
answer
to
question
Correct article usage
the question
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at 5%. After reconstruction,
people
who
dissatisfied
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were dissatisfied
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fell to 15%,
while
satisfied
people
soared to 40%, replacing
bad
Correct article usage
the bad
show examples
answer
proportion with good ones. The
people
who had a very satisfied mood was
also
a large amount at nearly one-third and the little per cent get
people
who were very dissatisfied about the
museum
and who did not
answer
at 5% for both.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, people, answer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor satisfaction
  • surveys
  • statistical measures
  • quantify
  • implications
  • facilities
  • evaluate
  • attraction
  • strategies
  • exhibits
  • publicity
  • renovation
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