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Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

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It is argued by some that speeches and presentations should be an integral part of a student's curriculum in school because
this
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 is going to be a part of their daily lives at work. Schools should
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 teach their students how to work as a team and how to defend themselves in a fight.
Children
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, when they grow up, will require themselves to be good storytellers in order to present their ideas and thoughts to their bosses or managers. If these skills are taught during their school life,
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 the foundation will be strong, thereby emerging as more confident in communicating and presenting their work to their clients.
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, the ICSE board of Indian primary and secondary education has mandatory subjects like extempore and presentations. These students are often found to be very articulate and confident when they start working.
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 to that, I believe schools should
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 inculcate team-building exercises and courses in self-defence.
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 courses prove to be a great survival skill for
children
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 not only during their school life but
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 when they become adults. On
one
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 hand, working as a team helps build a strong friendship during childhood
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 in old age, creating bonds with other people, resulting in increased happiness.
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, learning how to fight helps
children
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 defend themselves from bullies, and adults from thugs.
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, in Western countries, parents are enrolling their
children
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 in boxing and karate classes, now more than ever, because of the increased harassment their wards face
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 bullying. In conclusion, schools should teach their students how to give a speech and a presentation because it will make them more articulate and confident when they interact with their colleagues. Universities should
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 introduce courses related to defence-fighting and team-building exercises as they are essential survival skills.

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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You provided a comprehensive response to the task, addressing both why speeches and presentations are important and other skills that should be taught in schools.
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The examples you used were relevant and helped to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence cohesion
You created a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.

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