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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought over the world. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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Recently,
food
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 waste has been increasing worldwide. In my opinion,
this
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 is largely
due to
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 stores discarding lots of unsold
items
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 and
individuals
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 over-purchasing grocery
items
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. To address
this
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 issue, both shops and
individuals
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 should alter their behaviour. One of the major factors in
food
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loss
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 is merchandise disposing of excessive unused products, even when they are still safe to consume. The lack of marketing management skills might cause the excessive amount of disposed
items
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.
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, the famous convenience store, Family Mart, has succeeded in reducing
food
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loss
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 by as much as 1,000 kg a year by improving storage management and analyzing the data of which products are more likely to be purchased in a certain area.
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, managing storage and collecting consumer data is crucial to tackling the
food
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 waste issue and
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 is the part that should be promoted across the world.
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, over-purchasing grocery
items
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 at once connects to
food
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loss
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.
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, in my country, younger adults don't have enough time to go to grocery stores more than twice a week because of over-working hours.
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, 78 % of people answered they buy significant amounts of commodities at once;
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, most of these goods spoil and are discarded. A survey reported more than 1 ton of
food
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 has been disposed of from livelihood. To deal with that,
individuals
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 should make a list of
items
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 that they actually require and consider the portion before heading to the stores. In conclusion, I am adamant that the increased
food
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loss
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 is caused by businesses and
individuals
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. To solve
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, they both should care more about the
food
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 waste they bring about and alter their attitudes.

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task response
Consider further developing your points with a bit more detail. For example, discuss broader impacts of food waste or provide additional solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs are clearly linked together with smooth transitions. For instance, using phrases like 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,' could enhance the flow.
introduction/conclusion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which nicely frame your essay.
relevant examples
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-purchasing
  • food storage
  • premature spoilage
  • cultural norms
  • meals
  • portion sizes
  • aesthetic standards
  • edible
  • discarded
  • busy lifestyles
  • expiring
  • going bad
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