Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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living standards
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the environment and
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the schools. On the one hand, the implementation of these funds on discovering the
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the environment. Because it could increase awareness about greenhouse and know
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layer and how it absorbs the
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science in schools and increase their knowledge about it. It is crucial to
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such
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material. Which in a direct way led to the broad of the horizon of science among people. In conclusion, I completely
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plants
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issues.
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our knowledge about the
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nations to support the research on
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar. For instance, 'million of dollars should spent' should be 'millions of dollars should be spent.'
content
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points. The example about NASA is very broad and could be more specific.
structure
Improve the introduction and conclusion to make your position clearer. The introduction should clearly state your stance, and the conclusion should summarize your main points effectively.
vocabulary
Focus on using more appropriate academic vocabulary. For example, 'increase their knowledge about it' could be 'expand their knowledge in this field.'
content
The essay presents a clear argument with two main points: environmental benefits and educational advantages.
structure
The structure of the essay, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion is evident and logical.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • scientific discoveries
  • astronomy
  • satellites
  • international collaboration
  • economic benefits
  • living standards
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • healthcare
  • poverty reduction
  • distribute funds
  • resource allocation
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