Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar. For instance, 'million of dollars should spent' should be 'millions of dollars should be spent.'
content
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points. The example about NASA is very broad and could be more specific.
structure
Improve the introduction and conclusion to make your position clearer. The introduction should clearly state your stance, and the conclusion should summarize your main points effectively.
vocabulary
Focus on using more appropriate academic vocabulary. For example, 'increase their knowledge about it' could be 'expand their knowledge in this field.'
content
The essay presents a clear argument with two main points: environmental benefits and educational advantages.
structure
The structure of the essay, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion is evident and logical.
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