You are going to study at a college in another country. You need to find a place you will live. Write a letter to the college's accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival date, describe the kind of accommodation you need and say what you like the accommodation officer to do
Dear Sir/Madam,
Re:
Accommodation
Request for Upcoming Study Term I hope this
letter finds you well. My name is Uju and I am enrolled in the Global Business Management program, set to begin
on January 12th, 2025 and ending December 30th, 2028. My partner and child will be accompanying me during my studies due to
the fact that it is an intensive program from Monday to Friday 7 hours of daily classes and co-op.
We are seeking suitable accommodation
close to the college. We plan to arrive in Ontario on December 20th, 2024 and we would greatly appreciate assistance in securing family-friendly accommodation
. Ideally, we are looking for a two-bedroom apartment or house that is
child-friendly, with access to basic amenities, a fully equipped kitchen, and proximity to public transport or the campus. If the college provides family accommodation
, we would be interested in learning more about availability and pricing.
Please let us know what options are available and if there is any further
information you require from us. We would also
appreciate it if you could guide us through the application process or suggest any nearby housing options that fit our needs.
Thank you for your assistance, and I look forward to your prompt response.
Yours sincerely,
Uju EkeSubmitted by henikeassociates on
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down the long sentence describing your arrival date, course duration, and family situation into two smaller sentences to improve readability.
task achievement
Double-check for any minor grammatical errors, such as missing articles or awkward phrasing. Although not heavy, minor polishing can elevate the letter.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task comprehensively, from course details to specific accommodation needs.
task achievement
The tone is formal and appropriate for the context, maintaining a respectful and polite manner throughout.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are well-organized, each focusing on a single idea, which enhances the clarity of the letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are professionally done, adding to the overall coherence and formal tone.