In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or coeducational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

Are children
that
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are sent to single-
sex
school
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causes disadvantages
to
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their
life
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? In my personal opinion, no. In modern days, the internet is open.
Students
can have a conversation with another
sex
pretty easily if
the
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parents allow them to have messaging apps. Some of them might go out often and make friends with a friend of another
sex
.
However
, some individuals might be
an
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LGBTQ which is okay, but people might bully them. Learning in a single-
sex
school
does not
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future relationships and interactions with another
sex
. Take me
for example
. I learn in a single-
sex
school
and many of my friends can interact with another
sex
just fine! As we grow we learn to get used to it.
Although
some
individuals
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students
will feel awkward or nervous around another gender which is normal!
Secondly
,
internet
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is open! Now
its
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easy to talk to another gender. We have plenty of messaging apps that
allows
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you to chat and make friends with strangers
,
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if parents allow them.
However
, in some cases, some
students
might be attracted to the same
sex
, which isn't wrong!
But
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, some individuals or groups
finds
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it funny and
bullies
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them. Which can lead to suicidal thoughts, loneliness, and other mental health problems.
For instance
, when an LGBTQ
students
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walks in to do a presentation on Tuesday, the class starts to chat and point fingers at the person, which isn't appropriate. In conclusion, learning in a single-
sex
school
is not a problem
to
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future relationships because as we grow, we adapt.
Next,
the internet allows for
such
interactions pretty easily.
However
, some LGBTQ might find it a problem and experience bullying from other
students
.
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