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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the variation of movies produced by five countries throughout the three-year period from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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,the most obvious piece of evidence is that the average number of films released by
country
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 A is higher than the other 4 countries.
To begin
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 with, the amount of cinematography in
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country
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countries
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 A and B levelled off for the first two years which was around 80 and 50 respectively.
Although
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country
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 A consistently produced more movies than
country
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 B,both nations saw a significant drop in production in 2009.
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,over the period movies released in
country
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 C increased steadily from around 5 at the beginning of the period and reached a
peaked
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 at approximately 20. Other than that, films released in
country
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 D fluctuated gradually from 2007 to 2009 and hit
the
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 low of almost 10 in 2008.
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, film production stayed constant at 12 films per year in
country
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 D throughout the timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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