A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked you for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.
Dear Anna,
I hope you are doing well. It's been
such
a long time since we last
saw each other. You asked for the
advice about a camping holiday. In my opinion, it's a great idea because summer is the best time for doing an outdoor Correct your spelling
some
acitivity
.
As I Correct your spelling
activity
also
know that you enjoy sepending
time near nature and animals, Correct your spelling
spending
so
it can be a great Correct word choice
apply
oppertunity
to experience all Correct your spelling
opportunity
this
via camping. You can also
go for walk
in Correct article usage
a walk
forest
and have Add an article
the forest
look
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a look
on
different species of birds and it is very enchanting to hear Change preposition
at
thier
sounds. There are Correct your spelling
their
also
options for swimming because mostly
camping stations are near lake sides.
There are some things which you should be aware of. There are very dangerous types of Correct your spelling
most
mosquioes
around that place so keep a good quality mosquito repellent. Correct your spelling
mosquitoes
Morover
, washrooms are shared during the trip, so Correct your spelling
Moreover
its
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it's
necessry
to maintain your Correct your spelling
necessary
hygyne
by using a Correct your spelling
hygiene
senitizer
often. Please keep a jacket and blanket with you, Correct your spelling
sanitiser
sensitizer
however
it is summer season but nights are always cold Add a comma
however,
overthere
.
I would be more than happy if I could join you Correct your spelling
over there
in
Change preposition
on
this
camping holiday but my parents are coming to stay with me during these days.
I hope you have excellent
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an excellent
experince
on your excursion trip.
Best wishes,
AmiraCorrect your spelling
experience
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coherence cohesion
Work on breaking down the letter into more distinct paragraphs, ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
coherence cohesion
Proofread the text to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors such as 'sepending' (spending), 'oppertunity' (opportunity), 'thier' (their), 'mosquioes' (mosquitoes), 'Morover' (Moreover), 'hygyne' (hygiene), 'senitizer' (sanitizer), and 'overthere' (over there).
task achievement
The letter covers all points in the task, including explaining why the friend would enjoy camping, describing possible disadvantages, and mentioning whether you would like to go.
task achievement
The writing tone is friendly and appropriately informal, matching the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, effectively framing the communication.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite