Some people say that university education is the best way to achieve success in life, while others believe it is no longer true. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Experts say studying at
university
is very important and it helps to create your career.
However
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some people oppose
this
idea. Personally, everyone should work for their future. There are two
way
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for choosing
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you can
it
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.
Firstly
if you
graduated
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from
university
, it will be easier for you to find a job. Which requires maximum effort and study from you.More and more companies will offer you a job if you are graduated. It will help you find your workplace in future. Studying at
university
is
better
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the better
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way than walking around in vain. It should
also
be taken into account that not entering the
university
doesn't mean that
like
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life
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is over. Many entrepreneurs started their
business
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businesses
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at the age of 14,
15
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. If you want to set up your
business
early, you have to take debt.
Finally
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you will understand that some people are better
of
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getting a job after
university
and some people are better
of
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starting their own
business
. But l prefer to study at
university
because you will not be able to invest enough to start your own
business
if you are not rich
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The essay presents a balanced view by considering both sides of the argument regarding the importance of university education for success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achievement
  • acquisition
  • advancement
  • aspiring
  • credentials
  • credentials
  • employment
  • entrepreneurship
  • graduate
  • institutions
  • invest
  • knowledge
  • opportunities
  • pathways
  • perspective
  • networking
  • potential
  • prosperity
  • self-education
  • skills
  • success
  • tuition fees
  • university education
  • valuable
  • vocational
  • worldly knowledge
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