The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The following chart illustrates the
number
of shop openings and closures
in one country between 2011 and 2018. At first glance, it is evident that although
the number
of shop closures
was lower than closures
in 2011, it leapfrogged the number
of openings in 2018, reaching a higher number
than that.
Looking at the details for closures
, the number
of stores that opened was more than 6,000 in 2011. It had a fluctuation from 2011 to 2014 and then
, dropped significantly in 2015, reaching less than 1,000. However
, it compensated the
fall in 2016 and came back to 5,000. Change preposition
for the
Finally
, it almost levelled off from 2016 to 2018.
The number
of shop openings was at a peak of more than 8,000 in 2011, but it had a sudden fall in 2012 at near
4,000. After that, it rose gradually again to Change the word
nearly
6,000from
2012 to 2014. Another decrease was experienced in 2015 at 4,000, followed by a levelled-off over the next year. Correct your spelling
6,000 from
Lastly
, after having a slight rise in 2017, it decreased moderately in 2018.Submitted by ava.saljoughi on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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