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Band 6.5

You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter: explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need explain how you will keep up-to-date while you’re away suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir, I am Nezzy from the
account
Change the verb form
accounting

The verb account should be in the participle form when used as an adjective. Consider changing the form of this verb.

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 unit. I hope
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 email finds you well. I am writing
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 email to you to request a
one month
Add a hyphen
one-month

It seems that one month is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 leave starting next Monday. I have been working for
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 company for the past 5 years. I am hardworking and I
seldomly
Correct your spelling
seldom

If you don’t want seldomly to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

taken
Wrong verb form
take

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb taken. Consider changing it.

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 any sick days.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
due to
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 my mother's illness and poor condition at the moment, I must be by her side to take care of her.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, she is fragile and alone at home. I assure you that I will be available at all times and be contactable via emails and calls. I will still be working every day remotely.
In addition
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 I am away, Ryan will take over some of my job scope here. I have briefed him thoroughly and
ensure
Wrong verb form
ensured

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb ensure. Consider changing it.

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 he can contact me at any time. I hope you can consider my leave request. Thank you. Kind regards, Nezzy

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Logical Structure
Consider breaking down the paragraph where you discuss assurances and delegation for clearer organization.
Complete Response
Ensure that all roles and responsibilities are clearly divided when discussing task delegation.
Suitable Writing Tone
You have clearly explained the reason for your leave, providing a personal touch while maintaining professionalism.
Complete Response
You have included a plan for keeping up-to-date and covering your responsibilities, demonstrating foresight.
Greeting and Closing
Good use of greetings and salutation, maintaining a formal tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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