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The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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Graph
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The graph
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 below represents the data
how
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on how
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 many
people
 were without
cars
,with
one
car
 and
were having
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had
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 two
cars
 between 1990
to
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and
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 2015.
Overall
 ,only
plethora
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a plethora
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 of
people
were having
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had
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the
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apply
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two
cars
while
on the other
hand
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 the percentage of
people
 without
cars
keep
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kept
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 on declining throughout the years. A random trend is observed for the
people
 having
one
car
 over the years.
Firstly
, the trend for the ownership of two
cars
 was
reletively
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relatively
 steady for the first few
year
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years
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then
 later on after 2005 it began to escalate sharply with
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of 43% in 2030.
Secondly
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Secondly,
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 the
people
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number of people
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 without
any
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a
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car
 are constantly decreasing between 1990 to 2030.In 1990 ,around 52%
people
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of people
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 were without
cars
 and
this
 percentage is very significant.
However
,
this
 number reduced steeply to 13% in 2030.There has been variation in the number of
people
 with
one
car
for instance
 the number was lowest in 1990 which was
about35
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about 35
% that rose substantially to its peak value in 2005 with 58%
people
 with
one
car
.
Although
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend was observed till 2005
but
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apply
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after 2005 it
keep
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kept
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 on decreasing with some random variations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars, one, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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