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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart compares the
students
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'
preference
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preferences
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 in five subjects in two different middle schools.
Overall
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,
School
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 A has the highest proportion of
students
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 who are into
sport
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 most
students
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 from
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school
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School
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 B have a big interest in
craft
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crafts
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 or drawing. In
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school
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school,
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 A, more than one-third of
students
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 choose
sport
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sports
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 as their
favorite
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favourite
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subjects
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subject
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.
In contrast
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, other subjects only account for less than 10
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. There are 9
students
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 who like to study
science
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 and 6
students
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the
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an
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 interest
of
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in
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 social
science
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.
Moreover
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, language and arts only allocate a small number of
students
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, which are 5 and 4
students
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 respectively. Meanwhile in
school
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 B, a quarter of
students
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 prefer to learn crafting/drawing. There are just below 20
students
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 who love to learn
language
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the language
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. Social
science
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 was chosen by 10
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. Sport and
science
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 have the least amount of interest among
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, which are 5 and 2
students
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 consecutively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, school, science with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • favorite subjects
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • significant differences
  • similar levels of interest
  • subject preference
  • curriculum
  • facilities
  • impact
  • trend
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