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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given chart compares the
students
'
preference
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preferences
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 in five subjects in two different middle schools.
Overall
,
School
 A has the highest proportion of
students
 who are into
sport
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sports
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 most
students
 from
school
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School
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 B have a big interest in
craft
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crafts
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 or drawing. In
school
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school,
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 A, more than one-third of
students
 choose
sport
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sports
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 as their
favorite
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favourite
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subjects
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subject
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.
In contrast
, other subjects only account for less than 10
students
. There are 9
students
 who like to study
science
 and 6
students
 with
the
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an
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 interest
of
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 social
science
.
Moreover
, language and arts only allocate a small number of
students
, which are 5 and 4
students
 respectively. Meanwhile in
school
 B, a quarter of
students
 prefer to learn crafting/drawing. There are just below 20
students
 who love to learn
language
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the language
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. Social
science
 was chosen by 10
students
. Sport and
science
 have the least amount of interest among
students
, which are 5 and 2
students
 consecutively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • favorite subjects
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • significant differences
  • similar levels of interest
  • subject preference
  • curriculum
  • facilities
  • impact
  • trend
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