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The table and pie charts give information about the total value and the sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 to 2000.

The table and pie charts give information about the total value and the sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 to 2000.
The table and pie charts give information about the total
value
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 and the sources of
fish
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 imported to the US between 1988 to 2000. The table illustrates the
value
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 of
fish
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 importance to
United
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 States between 1988 to 2000. There are
also
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 charts which show the source countries and their
ratio
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 of imported
fish
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 to the United States.
Overall
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, It seems that the total
value
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 slightly increased during these periods. The importance
ratio
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 from China
also
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 rose between 1988 to 2000 but it was the opposite for Canada. İt had a downward trend in the relevant years. Regarding the table, the
value
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 of the imports rose from 6,57 billion dollars to 10.72 billion dollars. At the start of the period Canada had 60% of the
fish
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 that were imported to the United States and it was the biggest source country.
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 it fell to 34% in 1992 and they had the lowest
ratio
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 in 2000 with %28. But the situation was the opposite for China. İt started to %13 in 1988 and steadily increased
then
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 had a peak o with %30 in 2000. The most important point in
this
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 pie chart was the change in the
ratio
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in
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 Others.
While
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 the
ratio
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 for it %27 in 1988, it had a significant increase in 1992 with %46.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, fish, ratio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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