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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapaers or books because they will be to read everything they want online without paying. to what do you extent agree or disagree with this statment ?

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In the upcoming years, the possibility of reading everything for free through online platforms may cause a lack of purchases in printed newspapers and
books
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. It may be possible
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 the lower
price
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 offered by electronic
books
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,
also
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 known as
e-
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books
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.
However
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, some readers are still more comfortable to
use
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 paper-based
books
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. I personally agree with the latter statement because the human habit of reading printed literature is hard to change. On one hand, there are no additional printing costs needed to produce an e-book,
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 reducing the selling
price
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.
As a result
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, more money can be saved or spent by an individual for other needs. In reality, the
price
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 for a printed science textbook can reach up to 300 thousand rupiahs.
On the contrary
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, an e-book of the exact title can cost only about 200 thousand rupiahs. The difference in
price
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 is an advantage of
e-
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books
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 compared to the printed ones.
On the other hand
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, paper-based writings are much more convenient for some people to read than the online-based. Reading literature from a gadget can cause severe eye-sight problems,
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 as myopia and irritation. Nowadays, paper-based
books
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 are still dominating the population of literature in several university libraries in Indonesia. Many claim that
although
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e-
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books
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 are simpler, the
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 may increase the student’s screen time, which is bad for their health. As a conclusion, there may be a decrease in demand for printed writings
due to
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 the much cheaper option to
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e-
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books
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.
Nevertheless
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, the convenience provided by reading paper-based
books
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 can be one of the reasons the public will still
use
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 them in the future.

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relevant examples
Ensure all ideas are relevant and specific to strengthen arguments further. Including more concrete examples would enhance the essay's persuasiveness.
conclusion
While the essay concludes well, there could be a more explicit summary of the main points discussed to reinforce coherence.
introduction
Your essay demonstrates a clear structure with a strong introduction that outlines the essay's key points.
support points
The main arguments are supported with comparisons between e-books and printed books, adding depth to your response.
balanced view
The essay includes a balanced view, acknowledging different perspectives, contributing to a comprehensive response.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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