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The bar graph below shows the volume of fish and seafood consumed in Spain from 2008 to 2021, by sales format. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the volume of fish and seafood consumed in Spain from 2008 to 2021, by sales format. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar
charts
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chart
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 depicts
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the develomnets
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develomnets
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development
developments
 of fish and seafood between 2008 to 2021, It is clear from the graph that
had
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there was
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in
Rainbow
 Tourt Large below 200M
comparsion
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compared
 with Gilthead Seabream had
increase
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increased
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 quickly
in
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to
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 400M.
According to
 what is shown
First,
Rainbow
 Tourt Small
it
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apply
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is below
than
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Gilthead Seabream
it
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is above,
Secondly
, European Seabass
it
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is above
than
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200M to a small extent. Thridly,
Carp
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Carp,
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it is
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had
small
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a small
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per cent
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percentage
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 undergo 200M and a lot of
Rainbow
 Trout Large after that Tilapia prior
to
begin
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increase
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Also
 Freshwater Catfish
to increase
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 between 0 and 200M
Moreover
,
Atantic
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Atlantic
 Salmon close to 200M and take new phase until access to the end.
To sum up
 , we could say that had
deffrent
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difference
 between
Rainbow
 Tourt Large and Gilthead Seabream had a lot of changes from prior 0 to 200M and
develop
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 to 4 until access 600M.but
most
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must
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 be had a lot of changes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainbow, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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