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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelleing inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantage? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knoweldge or experience.

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Some
people
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 believe that in the future all
vehicles
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 will be
driverless
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, and
vehicles
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 will only carry passengers. I personally believe that
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 because of
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vehicles
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people
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 will no longer be able to enjoy driving, the benefits of
driverless
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cars
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 outweigh the drawbacks because there is no
possibility
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 of
accidents
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 in
driverless
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vehicles
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. The primary benefit of
driverless
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vehicles
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 is there is no
possibility
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 of road
accidents
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. With a human driver, there is always a
possibility
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 of an accident. A human driver becomes distracted by something
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 driving or may violate the traffic rules which may lead to an accident. If
vehicles
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 are
driverless
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, there will be no driver, and no
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 of being distracted,
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, there will be no risks of
accidents
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, life loss or injury.
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, in Australia, road
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 have reduced around 60% after
driverless
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cars
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 have been introduced on the roads.
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, I believe that
driverless
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cars
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 and other
vehicles
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 are beneficial because they save lives. In main drawback of
driverless
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vehicles
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 is
people
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 will no longer be able to enjoy driving.
People
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 who love driving and enjoy it as a favourite time pass will no longer be able to do it if all
vehicles
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 become
driverless
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.
People
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 will no longer enjoy long drives.
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, around 45% of
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 in Japan have
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 that after the launch of
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cars
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, they miss driving their own
vehicles
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 because it was a source of pleasure and enjoyment for them.
Driverless
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vehicles
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 have restricted that enjoyment for them.
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, I personally believe that saving lives is more important than enjoyment. In conclusion,
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driverless
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vehicles
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 do not let the public enjoy driving, they are free of
accidents
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, and there
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 no chances of life loss or injury.
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, the advantages of
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cars
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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task achievement
To enhance your task achievement, you might consider expanding a bit more on the counter-argument. Discuss why the draw of enjoying driving is less significant compared to the safety benefits. This will demonstrate a balanced consideration of both sides.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve the logical flow. Words like 'furthermore,' 'moreover,' or 'additionally' can help in maintaining coherence.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly outlines the thesis statement, providing a clear direction for the essay.
relevant specific examples
Effective use of specific statistics makes your argument more convincing, such as the accident reduction in Australia.
logical structure
The essay has a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for each main point, which makes it easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • quality of life
  • fossil fuels
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  • economic instability
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  • ethical dilemmas
  • decision-making
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  • safety choices
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