The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph illustrates the period.
In detail, In 1924, it can be seen that there were 3000
number
of participants divided into men
and female in the Olympics, while
the line graph shows the proportion of participants from 1924 until 2012. Overall
, at Add an article
a glance
glance
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glance,
men
was dominating
the Olympics Wrong verb form
dominated
in
every Change preposition
apply
years
, and the Change to a singular noun
year
number
of partcipants
still increased until the end ofCorrect your spelling
participants
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the
of
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apply
mens
participating in Correct your spelling
men
Olympics
and there Correct article usage
the Olympics
was
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were
women
following
this
event, besides
that, the number
of men
increased around
more than 4000 in 1952 and Change preposition
to
women
was
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increased
increase
too
around under 1000. Correct your spelling
to
In addition
, in
1984 until 2012 the proportion of Change preposition
from
men
and women
was increase
, for Wrong verb form
increased
men
about more than 5000 and slowly increase
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increased
almost
6000 in 2012. Change preposition
to almost
While for
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For
women
, it can be seen that in 1984 the number
of women
who participating
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participate
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in this
this
event Change preposition
in this
was
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increased
increase
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by
around
more than 1000 and dramatically increased in 2012 Change preposition
by
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by
around
over than two times almost Change preposition
by
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reaching
reached
5000.
Wrong verb form
reaching
On the other hand
, the number
of participants who played in Correct article usage
the Olympic
Olympic
in 1924 around almost 4000, and slowly Fix the agreement mistake
Olympics
increase
until 1984 Wrong verb form
increased
about
6000 and quickly Change preposition
to about
increase
in 2012 and Wrong verb form
increased
reach
more than 10000.Wrong verb form
reached
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men, women, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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